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Fussing with Trust by ~RaymoreClef:iconRaymoreClef:





Compare and Contrast me.
Put me in Pro’s and Con’s.
Shamefully, I am both.
A Pro at what I claim to do,
A Con of all I claim to be.
Compare me to a Vat of Lye.
Calm, Cool, Collected, Burn, Turn, and Boil.
Contrast the difference between us.

If I was on fire,
Would you beat me,
To put me out?
If I was a false profit,
Would you follow me blindly,
Or throw it in my face?

The will of man is pure,
But tainted in the eyes
Of others.
If the body, mind, and soul,
Are happy within them self,
Then why challenge it?

You can backslide so far,
Before you fall off the cliff.
Could you, would you, should you,
Ask me to catch you when you fall?

I should hope so,
For all my imperfections,
I am only one man,
I am only one dream,
I am only one cause,
I am only one effect.
Let my life ripple into yours,
And I will let your ripple unto me.

Gentle awareness of togetherness
Painful realization we are human.
Omnipresent rational,
That we will survive,
Though trust.

Fall with me.
©2007-2008 ~RaymoreClef
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Consider this my Epic return. I like it, but I think its not my best work. Nothing can out do the things I did when I was just doing it on the fly. This one I did actually think about. The results are the same, but the ideas and quality just lacks for me. Anyways what do you think?
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~BrokenBabe15:iconBrokenBabe15: Oct 22, 2007, 4:04:10 PM
i think it's amazing. maybe not ur best piece 2 u, but i like how this turned out. it's a lot more than i'm doing. i don't even remember the last time i wrote a poem. i think it was just a phase when i used 2 write it all the time. newayz, i like this, kinda confusing n sum parts,but im guessing thats how its sposed 2 b?

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Army Sergeant: Is there any reason you shouldn't be in this man's Army?
Max: I'm a cross-dressing homosexual pacifist with a spot on my lung.
Army Sergeant: As long as you don't have flat feet.
~RaymoreClef:iconRaymoreClef: Oct 22, 2007, 7:47:54 PM
Its always supposed to be confuseing - how else will you learn?

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I have voices in my head and I know you think I am crazy, but I dont listen to them. They speak in spanish and I have no idea what they are saying. Its annoying to I wish they would just get a job.
~Hanaakari:iconHanaakari: Oct 22, 2007, 9:00:05 PM Mood: Lust
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<3

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:Holds up cardboard sign: Will Work for Pocky!!
~RaymoreClef:iconRaymoreClef: Oct 23, 2007, 6:33:28 AM
Hunny your link was broken. But The message was implied. Edmund loves you.

<3

But hows about a review of the poem hun... :giggle:

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I have voices in my head and I know you think I am crazy, but I dont listen to them. They speak in spanish and I have no idea what they are saying. Its annoying to I wish they would just get a job.
~BrokenBabe15:iconBrokenBabe15: Oct 23, 2007, 8:32:49 PM
good point

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Army Sergeant: Is there any reason you shouldn't be in this man's Army?
Max: I'm a cross-dressing homosexual pacifist with a spot on my lung.
Army Sergeant: As long as you don't have flat feet.
~RaymoreClef:iconRaymoreClef: Oct 24, 2007, 5:29:56 AM
Yes i thought so..

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I have voices in my head and I know you think I am crazy, but I dont listen to them. They speak in spanish and I have no idea what they are saying. Its annoying to I wish they would just get a job.
~BlameitallonDia:iconBlameitallonDia: Oct 31, 2007, 8:03:44 PM
Not the best? I say one of your best and best is better than good. This one made me think of those I know, who I trust and what it took for me to do it. You know what I mean? Quite moving, to realize what you have done, thought of, and decided with or about someone without caring of their looks or other imperfections. Maybe this didn't fit with your poem but it's how I feel from it.

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~RaymoreClef:iconRaymoreClef: Nov 6, 2007, 2:07:17 PM
Well I made a new one. Its for the Becca, its about her character on WoW. Its fun, but not in the norm for me. I tried not to reuse any word (other then like And,To, It), so at least I did that right haha.

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I have voices in my head and I know you think I am crazy, but I dont listen to them. They speak in spanish and I have no idea what they are saying. Its annoying to I wish they would just get a job.
~BlameitallonDia:iconBlameitallonDia: Nov 6, 2007, 8:31:40 PM
Is that one up? lol

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